Hallo! Ich suche jetzt auch im Ausland, könnt mir mir bei diesen Schreiben ggf mal Kritik geben. Es soll ein klass. Motivtation Letter sein!
Hier ein bisschen allgemein gehalten, aber dieser soll Grundlage geben für weitere Bewerbungen. Vielleicht könnt ihr auch mal nach Formulierungsfehlern (grob) gucken.
Also, pls give me helping hand in my matter!
Thx 1000 times.
La
Dear Ms. Pohl, Ladies and Gentlemen,
I apply myself to you, because simultaneous treatment of various projects, meetings, phone ringing and hectic in the office does not stress me! Organizing is my core competency. Trouble-Shooting makes fun! Ease, balance and reliability, as well as open communication are not troubling me in hectic situations.
After finishing (graduation in March 2009) my studies in management sciences with a focus on organizational and financial sciences I search for a new professional challenge. The new challenge should combine my latest theoretical knowledge and my extensive industry experience, esp. in the automobile industry.
My particular interest in your advertised job is the versatility of the various complex tasks and the associated knowledge needed to fulfil the requirements. By working as an assistant, I would like focus on the complexity of mentioned working field and find an interesting way into my career.
Through my practical operations as a student staff at ZZZ AG, different PPP corporations in Germany and abroad and in the BBB Holding Ltd.. I thus solidified the desire as a Management Assistant.
My last work experience was within an assistant team for the Vice-President XXX Trucks in the PR China. I analyzed optimized for the activities of XXX AG knowledge acquisition for strategic controlling. My work also included competitor analysis, market studies, and preparation of joint venture-related KPIs. Process analysis but also classic assistant responsibilities such as travel arrangements, organizing events and meetings were part of my task.
As part of Business Development and Governmental Business activities, I have experience in the field of strategic knowledge generation. I am highly skilled in SSS and GGG.com is for research purposes.
In all my prior working tasks I was strong working, highly motivated, highly flexible in time and place. I have quick and accurate working style, a high load capacity as well as good language skills both in English as a foreign language.
Working together with people from diverse cultures has given me a special fun.
In summary, I see myself as a suitable candidate for the advertised position. Therefore I would greatly appreciate a personal acquaintance with you. For questions, I am happy to assist you. As a possible starting date, I see April 1st 2009 an easy start.
Yours sincerely,
➡ Bewerbung auf ENGLISCH ⇔ ist das so okay? ✔
Ich mache einfach mal die Sätze fett, von denen ich denke, dass sie richtig sind:
Dear Ms. Pohl, Ladies and Gentlemen,
I apply myself to you, because simultaneous treatment of various projects, meetings, phone ringing and hectic in the office does not stress me! Organizing is my core competency. Trouble-Shooting makes fun! Ease, balance and reliability, as well as open communication are not troubling me in hectic situations.
After finishing (graduation in March 2009) my studies in management sciences with a focus on organizational and financial sciences I search for a new professional challenge. The new challenge should combine my latest theoretical knowledge and my extensive industry experience, esp. in the automobile industry.
My particular interest in your advertised job is the versatility of the various complex tasks and the associated knowledge needed to fulfil the requirements. By working as an assistant, I would like focus on the complexity of mentioned working field and find an interesting way into my career.
Through my practical operations as a student staff at ZZZ AG, different PPP corporations in Germany and abroad and in the BBB Holding Ltd.. I thus solidified the desire as a Management Assistant.
My last work experience was within an assistant team for the Vice-President XXX Trucks in the PR China. I analyzed optimized for the activities of XXX AG knowledge acquisition for strategic controlling. My work also included competitor analysis, market studies, and preparation of joint venture-related KPIs. Process analysis but also classic assistant responsibilities such as travel arrangements, organizing events and meetings were part of my task.
As part of Business Development and Governmental Business activities, I have experience in the field of strategic knowledge generation. I am highly skilled in SSS and GGG.com is for research purposes.
In all my prior working tasks I was strong working, highly motivated, highly flexible in time and place. I have quick and accurate working style, a high load capacity as well as good language skills both in English as a foreign language.
Working together with people from diverse cultures has given me a special fun.
In summary, I see myself as a suitable candidate for the advertised position. Therefore I would greatly appreciate a personal acquaintance with you. For questions, I am happy to assist you. As a possible starting date, I see April 1st 2009 an easy start.
Yours sincerely,
Die Grammatik (z.B. die Zeiten) sind oft falsch. Einige Grammatikwörter fehlen einfach. Viele Wörter sind falsch gewählt, an manchen Stellen bedeuten sie sogar etwas, was gar nicht gemeint ist. Der Autor hat sicherlich keine Sekunde seiner Lebenszeit verschwendet, mal einen Artikel in einer englischen Zeitschrift zu lesen. Das wird besonders an so groben Fehlern wie "strong working" deutlich. Dabei kommt "hard working" so häufig vor. Auch "makes fun" statt "is fun" erfordert sicherlich kein hohes Niveau, um es richtig zu machen. Ich würde den Brief von jemand anderem schreiben lassen. Mit deinen Englischkenntnissen kommst du hier nicht weiter. Tut mir leid.
Dear Ms. Pohl, Ladies and Gentlemen,
I apply myself to you, because simultaneous treatment of various projects, meetings, phone ringing and hectic in the office does not stress me! Organizing is my core competency. Trouble-Shooting makes fun! Ease, balance and reliability, as well as open communication are not troubling me in hectic situations.
After finishing (graduation in March 2009) my studies in management sciences with a focus on organizational and financial sciences I search for a new professional challenge. The new challenge should combine my latest theoretical knowledge and my extensive industry experience, esp. in the automobile industry.
My particular interest in your advertised job is the versatility of the various complex tasks and the associated knowledge needed to fulfil the requirements. By working as an assistant, I would like focus on the complexity of mentioned working field and find an interesting way into my career.
Through my practical operations as a student staff at ZZZ AG, different PPP corporations in Germany and abroad and in the BBB Holding Ltd.. I thus solidified the desire as a Management Assistant.
My last work experience was within an assistant team for the Vice-President XXX Trucks in the PR China. I analyzed optimized for the activities of XXX AG knowledge acquisition for strategic controlling. My work also included competitor analysis, market studies, and preparation of joint venture-related KPIs. Process analysis but also classic assistant responsibilities such as travel arrangements, organizing events and meetings were part of my task.
As part of Business Development and Governmental Business activities, I have experience in the field of strategic knowledge generation. I am highly skilled in SSS and GGG.com is for research purposes.
In all my prior working tasks I was strong working, highly motivated, highly flexible in time and place. I have quick and accurate working style, a high load capacity as well as good language skills both in English as a foreign language.
Working together with people from diverse cultures has given me a special fun.
In summary, I see myself as a suitable candidate for the advertised position. Therefore I would greatly appreciate a personal acquaintance with you. For questions, I am happy to assist you. As a possible starting date, I see April 1st 2009 an easy start.
Yours sincerely,
Die Grammatik (z.B. die Zeiten) sind oft falsch. Einige Grammatikwörter fehlen einfach. Viele Wörter sind falsch gewählt, an manchen Stellen bedeuten sie sogar etwas, was gar nicht gemeint ist. Der Autor hat sicherlich keine Sekunde seiner Lebenszeit verschwendet, mal einen Artikel in einer englischen Zeitschrift zu lesen. Das wird besonders an so groben Fehlern wie "strong working" deutlich. Dabei kommt "hard working" so häufig vor. Auch "makes fun" statt "is fun" erfordert sicherlich kein hohes Niveau, um es richtig zu machen. Ich würde den Brief von jemand anderem schreiben lassen. Mit deinen Englischkenntnissen kommst du hier nicht weiter. Tut mir leid.
Bewerbung für eine Doktorstelle in GB
Hallo Leute!
Ich will mich in England für eine Doktorarbeit in Physik bewerben. Das Anscheiben möchte ich per e-Mail schicken. Es wäre super, wenn ihr schauen könnt, ob es grammatikalisch und stilistisch passt. Mein Englisch ist leider nicht so toll. Danke im voraus
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Dear Mr. XXX,
Application for a PhD-Programm
I read with interest your advertisement for a PhD Programm on the topic “XXX” at the University of XXX and should like to apply for the position as a graduate student at Your research group.
Recently I successfully finished my study of physics at the XXX university in XXX.
In my diploma thesis I was mainly dealing with transient absorption spectroscopy with femtosecond-pulses. The Diploma-thesis with the title „cw- and time-resolved experiments with(on?) molecular switches“ I did at the Lehrstuhl für XXX at the XXX-University in XXX by Professor XXX. Thereby a new synthetisised, photochromic molecular switch, a indolylfulgide, was investigated by means of the stationary and time resolved ultra short puls spectroscopy.
Fulgide are promising molecular switches, which can be used in molecular electronics, in optical data storage or for example as photochromic unities in biomacro-molecules.
The main goal was the investigation of the quantum yield and dynamic of isomerisation reactions.
Based on these investigations I gave a talk at the sommersymposium of the Deutsche Physikalische Gesellschaft (German Physical Sosiety) in XXX and a paper is published with the title „XXX“.
Currently I`m working as a science staff member at XXX- Institute with Prof. XXX. Now my job is to build up a set up for a parametric wavelengths conversion.
Please find enclosed my CV which details my education history to date. If you require any additional information please feel free to contact me at xxx@yyy.de.
I thank you for taking the time to consider my application and I would be delighted to attend a personal interview with you.
Yours sincerely
Name
Enclosed: CV
Ich will mich in England für eine Doktorarbeit in Physik bewerben. Das Anscheiben möchte ich per e-Mail schicken. Es wäre super, wenn ihr schauen könnt, ob es grammatikalisch und stilistisch passt. Mein Englisch ist leider nicht so toll. Danke im voraus
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Dear Mr. XXX,
Application for a PhD-Programm
I read with interest your advertisement for a PhD Programm on the topic “XXX” at the University of XXX and should like to apply for the position as a graduate student at Your research group.
Recently I successfully finished my study of physics at the XXX university in XXX.
In my diploma thesis I was mainly dealing with transient absorption spectroscopy with femtosecond-pulses. The Diploma-thesis with the title „cw- and time-resolved experiments with(on?) molecular switches“ I did at the Lehrstuhl für XXX at the XXX-University in XXX by Professor XXX. Thereby a new synthetisised, photochromic molecular switch, a indolylfulgide, was investigated by means of the stationary and time resolved ultra short puls spectroscopy.
Fulgide are promising molecular switches, which can be used in molecular electronics, in optical data storage or for example as photochromic unities in biomacro-molecules.
The main goal was the investigation of the quantum yield and dynamic of isomerisation reactions.
Based on these investigations I gave a talk at the sommersymposium of the Deutsche Physikalische Gesellschaft (German Physical Sosiety) in XXX and a paper is published with the title „XXX“.
Currently I`m working as a science staff member at XXX- Institute with Prof. XXX. Now my job is to build up a set up for a parametric wavelengths conversion.
Please find enclosed my CV which details my education history to date. If you require any additional information please feel free to contact me at xxx@yyy.de.
I thank you for taking the time to consider my application and I would be delighted to attend a personal interview with you.
Yours sincerely
Name
Enclosed: CV
Letter of motivation für Uni - Bewerbung
Hallo an Alle!
Für meine Bewerbung an der Hawai'i Pacific University benötige ich bis Ende des Monats einen letter of motivation.
Ich habe bereits einige Zeit mit meinem Entwurf verbracht, aber wirklich zufrieden bin ich damit nicht.
Daher hoffe ich auf Eure Hilfe!
Ich bin dankbar für jeden Ratschlag.
Viele Grüße!
Ganuchi
Dear Sir or Madam,
I first heard about HPU when I met one of the International Admissions Coordinators while I was studying in Germany. As I knew right away that HPU was the ideal place for me to achieve my goal, I would very much like to be considered for a HPU scholarship to gather practical experience in the travel & tourism industry while learning the theory required for career success.
Having recently acquired the professional qualification of a state-certified international tourist assistant, I am now very keen to study Travel Industry Management at your distinguished university in order to experience the greatest possible breadth of education.
The tourism and hospitality industry is a vast one - encompassing markets as diverse as hotels, clubs and resorts, airlines, tourist and leisure attractions, travel retail, tourism promotion, MICE, food and beverage services and many more.
Today, the industry is a widely dispersed economic giant. According to the World Travel and Tourism Council the contribution of the Travel & Tourism economy to total employment is expected to rise from 219,810,000 jobs in 2009 to 275,688,000 jobs by 2019. I would like to contribute to its continued growth.
Wishing to become a part of the world’s fastest growing industry I am prepared to invest effort and time to acquire the necessary skills from a management perspective which will be invaluable in seeking to understand what the tourism industry needs to do to improve their competitive edge, grow their business and seek out new business opportunities.
It was in high school that I found I had an aptitude for learning languages. As well as English, I studied Spanish: language is inevitably the key component of communication in successful international marketing, and Spanish is the world’s second language, in terms of business opportunities. Combined with French and German, these languages have given me a firm foundation for the study and practice of principles and techniques of travel management.
The numerous travel experiences I have made, generated a keen interest in foreign cultures and influenced my decision of studying Travel Industry Management. In addition to the linguistic benefits, experiencing different cultural backgrounds has contributed to my better understanding of how to market tourism products to specific target groups, since different cultural values require different marketing strategies. During my travels to Tunisia, Australia and several EU countries, I have not only enjoyed the local cultures and their heritage, but also gained invaluable insights into the needs and motivations of people which will enable me to manage businesses that conceptualize, develop and deliver interesting and innovative experiences for clients.
Having worked as an customer-service executive at Frankfurt airport for two years, I became thoroughly familiar with providing services, handling complaints, dispensing information, coordinating schedules and interacting with people of different cultures. This work experience solidified my interest in tourism and exposed me to the enormous potential of this developing field.
During my studies I was able to acquire further work experience during a placement with the Sunshine Castle in Bli Bli. The intensive period of work there gave me a valuable practical insight into the tourism, event and hospitality industry. My duties included organisation and coordination of weddings, functions and events, marketing assistance to the management, preparing and coordinating staff rosters, cash handling, providing accounting assistance, front of business customer service and, last but not least, the day-to-day handling of incoming and outgoing correspondence.
After several years of professional experience, I believe that I am ready to take the next step toward my goal of being an successful travel manager.
I am applying for the TIM program for three reasons. The first is that the course precisely matches my particular area of interest in travel industry: namely, travel industry marketing and hotel and resort management. The second is the high reputation of your school for producing outstanding graduates and keeping pace with changes in the travel industry. And the third is your close relationship with well known global companies, which gives students the opportunity to gain invaluable insights and experiences toward developing and charting their future careers in hospitality and travel industry. The combination of these factors makes your TIM program the natural choice for me at this point in my career.
The ideal education for me includes the comprehensive courses and small-size classes coupled with unique experiences like the cooperative education and the internship. Perhaps even more importantly, I hope to benefit from the HPU environment - an environment of boundless innovation. HPU will give me the opportunity to apply the theory, strategies and techniques I learn in the classroom to the real world. I intend to join the Travel Industry Management Student Organization and the activity advertising club, which will not only help me form lifelong friendships with fellow students from all over the world, but also give me exposure to top firms and successful entrepreneurs in Hawai’I’s travel industry.
The reasons I think I should be seriously considered for this scholarship are that I have the ability to take on new information quickly and to put it into operation immediately. I can think well on my feet and deal with pressure situations extremely well. I really enjoy taking on as much responsibility as possible and making a difference in whatever I apply myself to.
Beyond simply possessing an outstanding commitment to service and an abiding love for the tourism profession, I also feel myself well-qualified academically to become a highly successful entrant with your TIM program. For one thing, I was an excellent student with a strong concentration in both tourism marketing and in languages. Additionally, I am naturally inquisitive and this has fostered a personal interest in all aspects of the travel world. In light of my strong work ethic, my unwavering commitment to developing my talents to the full, and my studious nature, I feel that I will be an exemplary student at your institution.
Personal satisfaction plays a key role in my career decision. While monetary rewards are of practical importance, true job satisfaction springs from the opportunity to grow and learn within an industry. I enjoy acquiring new information and skills, which help me to grow as a professional. In addition, a career with open prospects would give me constant incentive to improve myself and to gain more knowledge.
After graduating from HPU, I will seek a position in international marketing or as an hotel manager. With a solid foundation in academic theory on customer service, marketing strategies, management, strategic planning, market research and project management gained through the Bachelor’s Degree program in Travel Tourism Management at the HPU I am confident that I will have the skills, knowledge and contacts that will enable me, as tourism industry manager, to deal with the complex issues of the tourism industry.
Thank you very much for taking the time to consider my application. I look forward to your positive response.
Yours faithfully
Für meine Bewerbung an der Hawai'i Pacific University benötige ich bis Ende des Monats einen letter of motivation.
Ich habe bereits einige Zeit mit meinem Entwurf verbracht, aber wirklich zufrieden bin ich damit nicht.
Daher hoffe ich auf Eure Hilfe!
Ich bin dankbar für jeden Ratschlag.
Viele Grüße!
Ganuchi
Dear Sir or Madam,
I first heard about HPU when I met one of the International Admissions Coordinators while I was studying in Germany. As I knew right away that HPU was the ideal place for me to achieve my goal, I would very much like to be considered for a HPU scholarship to gather practical experience in the travel & tourism industry while learning the theory required for career success.
Having recently acquired the professional qualification of a state-certified international tourist assistant, I am now very keen to study Travel Industry Management at your distinguished university in order to experience the greatest possible breadth of education.
The tourism and hospitality industry is a vast one - encompassing markets as diverse as hotels, clubs and resorts, airlines, tourist and leisure attractions, travel retail, tourism promotion, MICE, food and beverage services and many more.
Today, the industry is a widely dispersed economic giant. According to the World Travel and Tourism Council the contribution of the Travel & Tourism economy to total employment is expected to rise from 219,810,000 jobs in 2009 to 275,688,000 jobs by 2019. I would like to contribute to its continued growth.
Wishing to become a part of the world’s fastest growing industry I am prepared to invest effort and time to acquire the necessary skills from a management perspective which will be invaluable in seeking to understand what the tourism industry needs to do to improve their competitive edge, grow their business and seek out new business opportunities.
It was in high school that I found I had an aptitude for learning languages. As well as English, I studied Spanish: language is inevitably the key component of communication in successful international marketing, and Spanish is the world’s second language, in terms of business opportunities. Combined with French and German, these languages have given me a firm foundation for the study and practice of principles and techniques of travel management.
The numerous travel experiences I have made, generated a keen interest in foreign cultures and influenced my decision of studying Travel Industry Management. In addition to the linguistic benefits, experiencing different cultural backgrounds has contributed to my better understanding of how to market tourism products to specific target groups, since different cultural values require different marketing strategies. During my travels to Tunisia, Australia and several EU countries, I have not only enjoyed the local cultures and their heritage, but also gained invaluable insights into the needs and motivations of people which will enable me to manage businesses that conceptualize, develop and deliver interesting and innovative experiences for clients.
Having worked as an customer-service executive at Frankfurt airport for two years, I became thoroughly familiar with providing services, handling complaints, dispensing information, coordinating schedules and interacting with people of different cultures. This work experience solidified my interest in tourism and exposed me to the enormous potential of this developing field.
During my studies I was able to acquire further work experience during a placement with the Sunshine Castle in Bli Bli. The intensive period of work there gave me a valuable practical insight into the tourism, event and hospitality industry. My duties included organisation and coordination of weddings, functions and events, marketing assistance to the management, preparing and coordinating staff rosters, cash handling, providing accounting assistance, front of business customer service and, last but not least, the day-to-day handling of incoming and outgoing correspondence.
After several years of professional experience, I believe that I am ready to take the next step toward my goal of being an successful travel manager.
I am applying for the TIM program for three reasons. The first is that the course precisely matches my particular area of interest in travel industry: namely, travel industry marketing and hotel and resort management. The second is the high reputation of your school for producing outstanding graduates and keeping pace with changes in the travel industry. And the third is your close relationship with well known global companies, which gives students the opportunity to gain invaluable insights and experiences toward developing and charting their future careers in hospitality and travel industry. The combination of these factors makes your TIM program the natural choice for me at this point in my career.
The ideal education for me includes the comprehensive courses and small-size classes coupled with unique experiences like the cooperative education and the internship. Perhaps even more importantly, I hope to benefit from the HPU environment - an environment of boundless innovation. HPU will give me the opportunity to apply the theory, strategies and techniques I learn in the classroom to the real world. I intend to join the Travel Industry Management Student Organization and the activity advertising club, which will not only help me form lifelong friendships with fellow students from all over the world, but also give me exposure to top firms and successful entrepreneurs in Hawai’I’s travel industry.
The reasons I think I should be seriously considered for this scholarship are that I have the ability to take on new information quickly and to put it into operation immediately. I can think well on my feet and deal with pressure situations extremely well. I really enjoy taking on as much responsibility as possible and making a difference in whatever I apply myself to.
Beyond simply possessing an outstanding commitment to service and an abiding love for the tourism profession, I also feel myself well-qualified academically to become a highly successful entrant with your TIM program. For one thing, I was an excellent student with a strong concentration in both tourism marketing and in languages. Additionally, I am naturally inquisitive and this has fostered a personal interest in all aspects of the travel world. In light of my strong work ethic, my unwavering commitment to developing my talents to the full, and my studious nature, I feel that I will be an exemplary student at your institution.
Personal satisfaction plays a key role in my career decision. While monetary rewards are of practical importance, true job satisfaction springs from the opportunity to grow and learn within an industry. I enjoy acquiring new information and skills, which help me to grow as a professional. In addition, a career with open prospects would give me constant incentive to improve myself and to gain more knowledge.
After graduating from HPU, I will seek a position in international marketing or as an hotel manager. With a solid foundation in academic theory on customer service, marketing strategies, management, strategic planning, market research and project management gained through the Bachelor’s Degree program in Travel Tourism Management at the HPU I am confident that I will have the skills, knowledge and contacts that will enable me, as tourism industry manager, to deal with the complex issues of the tourism industry.
Thank you very much for taking the time to consider my application. I look forward to your positive response.
Yours faithfully
Englische Bewerbung
Hallo!
Ich schreibe gerade an einer englischen Bewerbung (aber für ein deutsches Unternehmen, die wollen das so).
Könntet ihr bitte mal drüberschaun?
Vielen Dank im Voraus!
Dear Ms XYZ
Application for team assistant
I refer to your job advertisement. The job seems to fit very well to my experience as a team assistant. My background in different departments makes me an ideal candidate for this position. Most of all I appreciate the possibility to bring in my experiences.
From March 2007 to December 2008 I was working for XYZ as a temp worker in the purchasing department. My day-to-day business was generating enquiries, checking offers, generating purchase orders, making price comparisons, controlling confirmations but also general secretarial duties.
Last year I was working in the financial department at XYZ for four months. My main tasks were accounting and assigning invoices.
During my career I have acquired good organising ability, fluent English skills and very good computer literacy in MS Office and SAP R/3.
I always keep on continuing my education for example taking part in language courses in English and also Russian.
My experience and my motivation make me the perfect applicant for this role.
I can start the job immediately. My desired salary is
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely
Name
Ich schreibe gerade an einer englischen Bewerbung (aber für ein deutsches Unternehmen, die wollen das so).
Könntet ihr bitte mal drüberschaun?
Vielen Dank im Voraus!
Dear Ms XYZ
Application for team assistant
I refer to your job advertisement. The job seems to fit very well to my experience as a team assistant. My background in different departments makes me an ideal candidate for this position. Most of all I appreciate the possibility to bring in my experiences.
From March 2007 to December 2008 I was working for XYZ as a temp worker in the purchasing department. My day-to-day business was generating enquiries, checking offers, generating purchase orders, making price comparisons, controlling confirmations but also general secretarial duties.
Last year I was working in the financial department at XYZ for four months. My main tasks were accounting and assigning invoices.
During my career I have acquired good organising ability, fluent English skills and very good computer literacy in MS Office and SAP R/3.
I always keep on continuing my education for example taking part in language courses in English and also Russian.
My experience and my motivation make me the perfect applicant for this role.
I can start the job immediately. My desired salary is
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely
Name
Bewerbungsservice für englischsprachige Bewerbungen
Hallo zusammen!
Bin aktuell als Finance Manager in Deutschland tätig und überlege, meinen Wohnsitz nach England zu verlegen. Leider habe ich keine erfahrungen mit Anschreiben in englischer Sprache und englischen CVs. Ich weiss dass es Anbieter gibt, die Bewerbungsunterlagen auf deutsch erstellen oder verbessern. Kennt von Euch jemand einen Anbieter, der sowas auch für englische Unterlagen anbietet? Und welche Erfahrung habt Ihr damit gemacht?
Freue mich auf zahlreiche Antworten. Vielen Dank!
Bin aktuell als Finance Manager in Deutschland tätig und überlege, meinen Wohnsitz nach England zu verlegen. Leider habe ich keine erfahrungen mit Anschreiben in englischer Sprache und englischen CVs. Ich weiss dass es Anbieter gibt, die Bewerbungsunterlagen auf deutsch erstellen oder verbessern. Kennt von Euch jemand einen Anbieter, der sowas auch für englische Unterlagen anbietet? Und welche Erfahrung habt Ihr damit gemacht?
Freue mich auf zahlreiche Antworten. Vielen Dank!
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Hilfe bei letter of motivation - bitte gegenlesen
Hallo!
Ich bewerbe mich für den Studiengang International Business an der FH Hannover und würde gerne wissen, wie ich meinen letter of motivation noch verbessern kann. Bin für jeden Vorschlag dankbar.
Vielen Dank Kimi
Dear Sir or Madam,
Herewith I apply for the Bachelor program in International Business Studies at the Fachhochschule Hannover. I am a woman of 20 years living in Petershagen, NRW and just received my “Abitur”. Because I have always been interested in cultures and languages and to have a challenging job, I am of the opinion that studying International Business will help me fulfill my dreams.
I like meeting different people and learn something about their way of life and their traditions. I traveled to a lot of different countries, not just to enjoy the landscape but to meet its inhabitants. An exceptional experience I do not want to miss was my exchange year in Missouri, USA, in 2007/8 which assured my wish to follow an international career. Besides the deep impact this had on my personal development it increased my English skills and made me a lot more STOP.
I also decided to study International Business because I like to manage certain things. Organizing the graduation book and the graduation show of my school was something I enjoyed a lot. Working together with different people and having to solve certain problems made me realize that I should be able to tap my full potential in my job.
I am very motivated and open-minded to learn more about economics and how to work with international companies. Surely studying International Business will path me the way to my dream job.
Yours sincerely,
Ich bewerbe mich für den Studiengang International Business an der FH Hannover und würde gerne wissen, wie ich meinen letter of motivation noch verbessern kann. Bin für jeden Vorschlag dankbar.
Vielen Dank Kimi
Dear Sir or Madam,
Herewith I apply for the Bachelor program in International Business Studies at the Fachhochschule Hannover. I am a woman of 20 years living in Petershagen, NRW and just received my “Abitur”. Because I have always been interested in cultures and languages and to have a challenging job, I am of the opinion that studying International Business will help me fulfill my dreams.
I like meeting different people and learn something about their way of life and their traditions. I traveled to a lot of different countries, not just to enjoy the landscape but to meet its inhabitants. An exceptional experience I do not want to miss was my exchange year in Missouri, USA, in 2007/8 which assured my wish to follow an international career. Besides the deep impact this had on my personal development it increased my English skills and made me a lot more STOP.
I also decided to study International Business because I like to manage certain things. Organizing the graduation book and the graduation show of my school was something I enjoyed a lot. Working together with different people and having to solve certain problems made me realize that I should be able to tap my full potential in my job.
I am very motivated and open-minded to learn more about economics and how to work with international companies. Surely studying International Business will path me the way to my dream job.
Yours sincerely,
letter of motivation - international tourism management
Hey Leute
Ich habe gerade zum ersten mal ein Motivationsschreiben aufgesetzt und bin mir ziemlich unsicher ob das so OK ist. Ich habe mir vorher ein paar beispiele angeguckt und dann einfach ma drauf losgeschrieben und das ist dabei rausgekommen.
Wäre sehr dankbar wenn ihr mal einen Blicki drauf werfen könntet und mir eine kurze Kritik bzw verbesserungsvorschläge gibt.
vielen dank
Dear Ladies and Gentlemen,
Hereby I would like to express my interest in the Bachelor Programm International Tourism Management at NHTV Breda in (for?) fall 2011.
My desire to study (in?) this particular field reflects my huge interest in different countries, their people (residents?), culture, language and their environment.
One of my majors in school was Geography which gave me a great insight into different countries, their culture and history and especially their development according to the tourism industry.
After graduating from school in June 2009 I achieved my dream of becoming an Au Pair in the United States of America, where I am going to be until April 2011.
So far I learned a lot during my stay here. Living with another family that I saw the first time the day when I arrived in Massachusetts and moved to their house was really exciting I adjusted pretty fast to the situation and felt very confident with the new contry and culture.
Working with the kids needs a lot of patience and since I am here my skills of patience improved a lot. The time here made my character really strong and independent. I can handle a lot of difficult situations and always stay optimistic in those.
I need to plan the days with the kids on my own which let me become a very well-organised person who can handle stressful situations really well.
This international experience was also a great opportunity to improve my English skills since I had the chance to take a few English classes at a local College and passed an institutional TOEFL – test. I also took an American Culture and History class which gave me a lot of interesting information about the country.
Additionally staying abroad for such a long time encouraged me to study and live abroad for, if possible, most time of my life.
As it is my future goal to work in the multilateral and always expanding tourism industry I would like to start my international career as a German student in the Netherlands.
The work as a tourism manager has been fascinating me for a couple of years and the internship I did at the M*** Hotel in 2007 strengthened my interest pretty much.
I am also planning to gain some experience in a travel agency once I’m back in Germany to get a wider view of the whole industry.
Ich habe gerade zum ersten mal ein Motivationsschreiben aufgesetzt und bin mir ziemlich unsicher ob das so OK ist. Ich habe mir vorher ein paar beispiele angeguckt und dann einfach ma drauf losgeschrieben und das ist dabei rausgekommen.
Wäre sehr dankbar wenn ihr mal einen Blicki drauf werfen könntet und mir eine kurze Kritik bzw verbesserungsvorschläge gibt.
vielen dank
Dear Ladies and Gentlemen,
Hereby I would like to express my interest in the Bachelor Programm International Tourism Management at NHTV Breda in (for?) fall 2011.
My desire to study (in?) this particular field reflects my huge interest in different countries, their people (residents?), culture, language and their environment.
One of my majors in school was Geography which gave me a great insight into different countries, their culture and history and especially their development according to the tourism industry.
After graduating from school in June 2009 I achieved my dream of becoming an Au Pair in the United States of America, where I am going to be until April 2011.
So far I learned a lot during my stay here. Living with another family that I saw the first time the day when I arrived in Massachusetts and moved to their house was really exciting I adjusted pretty fast to the situation and felt very confident with the new contry and culture.
Working with the kids needs a lot of patience and since I am here my skills of patience improved a lot. The time here made my character really strong and independent. I can handle a lot of difficult situations and always stay optimistic in those.
I need to plan the days with the kids on my own which let me become a very well-organised person who can handle stressful situations really well.
This international experience was also a great opportunity to improve my English skills since I had the chance to take a few English classes at a local College and passed an institutional TOEFL – test. I also took an American Culture and History class which gave me a lot of interesting information about the country.
Additionally staying abroad for such a long time encouraged me to study and live abroad for, if possible, most time of my life.
As it is my future goal to work in the multilateral and always expanding tourism industry I would like to start my international career as a German student in the Netherlands.
The work as a tourism manager has been fascinating me for a couple of years and the internship I did at the M*** Hotel in 2007 strengthened my interest pretty much.
I am also planning to gain some experience in a travel agency once I’m back in Germany to get a wider view of the whole industry.
ich wäre euch auch sehr dankbar wenn ihr mal über mein motivationsschreiben drüber gucken könntet. Ich hab heute zum ersten mal so ein schrieben aufgesetzt und naja....das ist dabei rumgekommen
Dear Ladies and Gentlemen,
Hereby I would like to express my interest in the Bachelor Programm International Tourism Management at NHTV Breda in (for?) fall 2011.
My desire to study (in?) this particular field reflects my huge interest in different countries, their people (residents?), culture, language and their environment.
One of my majors in school was Geography which gave me a great insight into different countries, their culture and history and especially their development according to the tourism industry.
After graduating from school in June 2009 I achieved my dream of becoming an Au Pair in the United States of America, where I am going to be until April 2011.
So far I learned a lot during my stay here. Living with another family that I saw the first time the day when I arrived in Massachusetts and moved to their house was really exciting I adjusted pretty fast to the situation and felt very confident with the new contry and culture.
Working with the kids needs a lot of patience and since I am here my skills of patience improved a lot. The time here made my character really strong and independent. I can handle a lot of difficult situations and always stay optimistic in those.
I need to plan the days with the kids on my own which let me become a very well-organised person who can handle stressful situations really well.
This international experience was also a great opportunity to improve my English skills since I had the chance to take a few English classes at a local College and passed an institutional TOEFL – test. I also took an American Culture and History class which gave me a lot of interesting information about the country.
Additionally staying abroad for such a long time encouraged me to study and live abroad for, if possible, most time of my life.
As it is my future goal to work in the multilateral and always expanding tourism industry I would like to start my international career as a German student in the Netherlands.
The work as a tourism manager has been fascinating me for a couple of years and the internship I did at the M*** Hotel in 2007 strengthened my interest pretty much.
I am also planning to gain some experience in a travel agency once I’m back in Germany to get a wider view of the whole industry.
Dear Ladies and Gentlemen,
Hereby I would like to express my interest in the Bachelor Programm International Tourism Management at NHTV Breda in (for?) fall 2011.
My desire to study (in?) this particular field reflects my huge interest in different countries, their people (residents?), culture, language and their environment.
One of my majors in school was Geography which gave me a great insight into different countries, their culture and history and especially their development according to the tourism industry.
After graduating from school in June 2009 I achieved my dream of becoming an Au Pair in the United States of America, where I am going to be until April 2011.
So far I learned a lot during my stay here. Living with another family that I saw the first time the day when I arrived in Massachusetts and moved to their house was really exciting I adjusted pretty fast to the situation and felt very confident with the new contry and culture.
Working with the kids needs a lot of patience and since I am here my skills of patience improved a lot. The time here made my character really strong and independent. I can handle a lot of difficult situations and always stay optimistic in those.
I need to plan the days with the kids on my own which let me become a very well-organised person who can handle stressful situations really well.
This international experience was also a great opportunity to improve my English skills since I had the chance to take a few English classes at a local College and passed an institutional TOEFL – test. I also took an American Culture and History class which gave me a lot of interesting information about the country.
Additionally staying abroad for such a long time encouraged me to study and live abroad for, if possible, most time of my life.
As it is my future goal to work in the multilateral and always expanding tourism industry I would like to start my international career as a German student in the Netherlands.
The work as a tourism manager has been fascinating me for a couple of years and the internship I did at the M*** Hotel in 2007 strengthened my interest pretty much.
I am also planning to gain some experience in a travel agency once I’m back in Germany to get a wider view of the whole industry.
Englische Bewerbung... bitte korrekturlesen
Hi,
hab für meinen Cousin eine Bewerbung ins englische übersetzt und wollte mal nett fragen ob jemand kurz Zeit hat eben die Gramatik zu überprüfen ( mein Englisch inst ein bischen eingerostet
) falls noch ein paar Ideen oder Verbesserungen dabei sind, ich freu mich über alles
hab ein paar Platzhalter eingebaut, aber das seht ihr ja dann....
beste Dank im Voraus....
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Application for an Employment as Survey Engineer in Plant & Facility Division
Dear Mr ??????,
through your employee -Name- my attention was directed to -Bewerbungsfirma- and I would like to apply for the job as survey engineer.
In August 2007 I started my industrial training as precision mechanic at -Firma- in -Ort-, that I finished successful at 2010-01-29.
During my training I could make wide experience with CNC controlled machinery, as well as with milling- and drill machines and I was also many-sided deployed as machine operator.
Furthermore I could participate in external further training and for that expertise and amplify my learned skills.
After my Job Training i could deploy my job-related experience in the company
-Firma- as well as -Firma-.
I´m interested to exert my knowledge and skills for -Bewerbungsfirma-. I´m flexible and reliable and would be pleased to strengthen your Company and take new Challenges.
I look forward to hearing from you and to being granted the opportunity of an interview.
Yours sincerely
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hab für meinen Cousin eine Bewerbung ins englische übersetzt und wollte mal nett fragen ob jemand kurz Zeit hat eben die Gramatik zu überprüfen ( mein Englisch inst ein bischen eingerostet
) falls noch ein paar Ideen oder Verbesserungen dabei sind, ich freu mich über alleshab ein paar Platzhalter eingebaut, aber das seht ihr ja dann....
beste Dank im Voraus....
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Application for an Employment as Survey Engineer in Plant & Facility Division
Dear Mr ??????,
through your employee -Name- my attention was directed to -Bewerbungsfirma- and I would like to apply for the job as survey engineer.
In August 2007 I started my industrial training as precision mechanic at -Firma- in -Ort-, that I finished successful at 2010-01-29.
During my training I could make wide experience with CNC controlled machinery, as well as with milling- and drill machines and I was also many-sided deployed as machine operator.
Furthermore I could participate in external further training and for that expertise and amplify my learned skills.
After my Job Training i could deploy my job-related experience in the company
-Firma- as well as -Firma-.
I´m interested to exert my knowledge and skills for -Bewerbungsfirma-. I´m flexible and reliable and would be pleased to strengthen your Company and take new Challenges.
I look forward to hearing from you and to being granted the opportunity of an interview.
Yours sincerely
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Re: Englische Bewerbung... bitte korrekturlesen
Hi, hab da mal ein bisschen was reingeschrieben. Allgemein ist noch zu beachten, dass im Englischen nur Eigennamen, und nicht alle Nomen groß geschrieben werden (Gerade im letzten Abschnitt).Bagomba hat geschrieben: Application for an Employment as Survey Engineer in Plant & Facility Division
Dear Mr ??????,
through your employee -Name- my attention was directed to -Bewerbungsfirma- and I would like to apply for the job as survey engineer.
In August 2007 I started my industrial training as a precision mechanic at -Firma- in -Ort-, which I finished successfully on 2010-01-29.
During my training I could make besser: I have been able to make wide experiences with CNC controlled machinery, as well as with milling- and drill machines and I was also many-sided deployed as machine operator. <=Den Satz brauche ich mal auf Deutsch, damit ich den Sinn vertsehe
Furthermore I could participate in external further training and for that expertise and amplify my learned skills.Ich glaube du willst sagen: Ich hatte die Möglichkeit, externe Fortbildungen zu machen. Du sagst aber: Ich würde das machen. Besser: I did patricipate... aber zum besseren Verständnis wäre mir der Satz auf deutsch auch ganz recht
After my Job Training I had been able to deploy my job-related experience in the company
-Firma- as well as -Firma-.
I´m interested to exert my knowledge and skills for -Bewerbungsfirma-. I´m flexible and reliable and would be pleased to strengthen your Company and take new Challenges. Das wirkt zu kurz, musst du noch etwas ausschmücken
I look forward to hearing from you and to being granted the opportunity of an interview.
Yours sincerely
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LG, Elli
Hi Elli007
erstmal danke für deine Hilfe...
ich schreib mal die sätze auf deutsch in blau direkt darunter
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During my training I could make besser: I have been able to make wide experiences with CNC controlled machinery, as well as with milling- and drill machines and I was also many-sided deployed as machine operator. <=Den Satz brauche ich mal auf Deutsch, damit ich den Sinn vertsehe
Während meiner Ausbildung habe ich viele Erfahrungen mit dem Umgang von CNC gesteuerten Maschinen, sowie an Fräs- und Bohrmaschinen sammeln können und wurde vielseitig in Bereichen der Maschinenführung eingesetzt.
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Furthermore I could participate in external further training and for that expertise and amplify my learned skills.Ich glaube du willst sagen: Ich hatte die Möglichkeit, externe Fortbildungen zu machen. Du sagst aber: Ich würde das machen. Besser: I did patricipate... aber zum besseren Verständnis wäre mir der Satz auf deutsch auch ganz recht Winken
Weiterhin konnte ich an außerbetrieblichen Maßnahmen teilnehmen und so meine erlernten Fähigkeiten erweitern und festigen
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deine formulierungen hören sich auf jeden fall besser an als meine
erstmal danke für deine Hilfe...
ich schreib mal die sätze auf deutsch in blau direkt darunter
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During my training I could make besser: I have been able to make wide experiences with CNC controlled machinery, as well as with milling- and drill machines and I was also many-sided deployed as machine operator. <=Den Satz brauche ich mal auf Deutsch, damit ich den Sinn vertsehe
Während meiner Ausbildung habe ich viele Erfahrungen mit dem Umgang von CNC gesteuerten Maschinen, sowie an Fräs- und Bohrmaschinen sammeln können und wurde vielseitig in Bereichen der Maschinenführung eingesetzt.
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Furthermore I could participate in external further training and for that expertise and amplify my learned skills.Ich glaube du willst sagen: Ich hatte die Möglichkeit, externe Fortbildungen zu machen. Du sagst aber: Ich würde das machen. Besser: I did patricipate... aber zum besseren Verständnis wäre mir der Satz auf deutsch auch ganz recht Winken
Weiterhin konnte ich an außerbetrieblichen Maßnahmen teilnehmen und so meine erlernten Fähigkeiten erweitern und festigen
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deine formulierungen hören sich auf jeden fall besser an als meine
Bitte, bitte
also den ersten Satz würde ich so schreiben:
During my training I have been able to make a lot of experiences with CNC controlled machines, as well as with milling- and drill machines.
In addition, I did get deployed as a machine operator many-sided.
Den zweiten Satz so:
Furthermore, I had been given the chance to participate in external trainings to broaden and improve my learned skills.
also den ersten Satz würde ich so schreiben:
During my training I have been able to make a lot of experiences with CNC controlled machines, as well as with milling- and drill machines.
In addition, I did get deployed as a machine operator many-sided.
Den zweiten Satz so:
Furthermore, I had been given the chance to participate in external trainings to broaden and improve my learned skills.
englisches Bewerbungsschreiben brauche hilfe
Hallo
ich könnte eure hilfe gebrauchen.
und zwar möchte ich mich gerne in England im Hotelfach bewerben;
als erstes möchte ich euch bitten ob ihr meine bewerbung mal durchlesen könnt und vielleicht verbesserungsvorschläge habt,
dann möchte ich diese bewerbung gerne mit einfliessen lassen das mein englisch nicht perfekt ist, dass ich dies jedoch unbedingt ändern möchte was auch ein grund ist warum ich nach england möchte..
okay ich hoffe ihr könnt mir helfen, danke schonmal an alle die sich die mühe machen.
Dear Mrs. and Mr…
with great interest i read your information about your hotel. The position you offered,sounds very responsive for me, I would like to introduce myself as a motivated employee, the guests' satisfaction is my focus.
I was fascinated from the beginning of direct contact with the guests, and primarily the resonance between excellent service and a satisfied guest. Therefore the friendliness and attention not meaningless words for me, it is the foundation for my daily occurrence.
My previous responsibilities were in addition to reservations, check-in and check-out, and the daily posting.
I see my strengths is that I can be very good at dealing with people and not even under heavy workload, the overview and the outward calm keep. Friendliness to the guests, colleagues and superiors for me also a matter of course.
I'm happy to occupy that position in your house and let my professional qualifications, incorporate personal experiences and motivations.
I see this as a logical step for me in terms of my professional fulfillment and advancement.
Dear Mrs. and Mr…, for any further information, please contact me in a personal interview and complete your first impressions of my application materials
Sincerely,
ich könnte eure hilfe gebrauchen.
und zwar möchte ich mich gerne in England im Hotelfach bewerben;
als erstes möchte ich euch bitten ob ihr meine bewerbung mal durchlesen könnt und vielleicht verbesserungsvorschläge habt,
dann möchte ich diese bewerbung gerne mit einfliessen lassen das mein englisch nicht perfekt ist, dass ich dies jedoch unbedingt ändern möchte was auch ein grund ist warum ich nach england möchte..
okay ich hoffe ihr könnt mir helfen, danke schonmal an alle die sich die mühe machen.
Dear Mrs. and Mr…
with great interest i read your information about your hotel. The position you offered,sounds very responsive for me, I would like to introduce myself as a motivated employee, the guests' satisfaction is my focus.
I was fascinated from the beginning of direct contact with the guests, and primarily the resonance between excellent service and a satisfied guest. Therefore the friendliness and attention not meaningless words for me, it is the foundation for my daily occurrence.
My previous responsibilities were in addition to reservations, check-in and check-out, and the daily posting.
I see my strengths is that I can be very good at dealing with people and not even under heavy workload, the overview and the outward calm keep. Friendliness to the guests, colleagues and superiors for me also a matter of course.
I'm happy to occupy that position in your house and let my professional qualifications, incorporate personal experiences and motivations.
I see this as a logical step for me in terms of my professional fulfillment and advancement.
Dear Mrs. and Mr…, for any further information, please contact me in a personal interview and complete your first impressions of my application materials
Sincerely,
Anschreiben für Job in China
Hallo, hat vielleicht jemand mit Bewerbung in China? Möchte mich in einen Hotel als Sales Manager bewerben. Bewerbung soll auf Englisch sein.
Ich nehme an ganz normaler Tabellarischer Lebenslauf.
Wie lang soll das Anschreiben sein? Wie finde ihr das.
Dear Sir or Madam.
As I see my occupational career in an international hotel chain, I would like to apply for the job as a Sales Manager at ….
Due to the markedly kudos of this hotel as well as to the efficient ideally chosen location is this position ideal for me .
I’m applying for this job as I could use my knowledge of languages very advantageously and as I am highly interested in the division of Sales Management and its multifarious assignments.
I can undoubtedly and for your fullest satisfaction acquit myself especially of the multicultural components of the different countries, which in my opinion merge very well with me.
Regarding the experiences I’ve already gained at the sales areas of assurance companies, at my current job at the .........hotel group and at my numerous language holidays I have the necessary conditions to cope with the enjoined challenges on me for the good of your hotel as well as in terms of the satisfaction of the clients. Therefore, I’d like to call your attention to the enclosed curriculum vitae, where you can find details of my occupational development.
I am a very communicative and cosmopolitan young woman, who approaches people openly and always friendly. Difficulties or extensive wishes of my clients are not an annoying problem but a steady challenge for me.
I hope I was able to convince you of my qualifications and am looking forward to a thriving collaboration.
Yours sincerely
Danke für euere Tipps.
Ich nehme an ganz normaler Tabellarischer Lebenslauf.
Wie lang soll das Anschreiben sein? Wie finde ihr das.
Dear Sir or Madam.
As I see my occupational career in an international hotel chain, I would like to apply for the job as a Sales Manager at ….
Due to the markedly kudos of this hotel as well as to the efficient ideally chosen location is this position ideal for me .
I’m applying for this job as I could use my knowledge of languages very advantageously and as I am highly interested in the division of Sales Management and its multifarious assignments.
I can undoubtedly and for your fullest satisfaction acquit myself especially of the multicultural components of the different countries, which in my opinion merge very well with me.
Regarding the experiences I’ve already gained at the sales areas of assurance companies, at my current job at the .........hotel group and at my numerous language holidays I have the necessary conditions to cope with the enjoined challenges on me for the good of your hotel as well as in terms of the satisfaction of the clients. Therefore, I’d like to call your attention to the enclosed curriculum vitae, where you can find details of my occupational development.
I am a very communicative and cosmopolitan young woman, who approaches people openly and always friendly. Difficulties or extensive wishes of my clients are not an annoying problem but a steady challenge for me.
I hope I was able to convince you of my qualifications and am looking forward to a thriving collaboration.
Yours sincerely
Danke für euere Tipps.
Ich finde dein Englisch wirklich gut, das ist erst mal positiv.
Aber pass auf die Kommas auf...
Sonst find ichs super^^ aber ich hab keine Erfahrungen mit englischen Bewerbungsbriefe und weiß auch nicht, wie die das machen. Ich hab gehört, englische Bewerbungen sollen anders sein als deutsche. Ich denke du weißt das schon und wenn nicht, dann erkundige dich in Internet nochmal (:
Viel Glück!
Aber pass auf die Kommas auf...
Hier würde ich zum Beispiel ein Komma einsetzen.Regarding the experiences I’ve already gained at the sales areas of assurance companies, at my current job at the .........hotel group and at my numerous language holidays, I have the necessary conditions to cope with the enjoined challenges on me for the good of your hotel as well as in terms of the satisfaction of the clients.
Sonst find ichs super^^ aber ich hab keine Erfahrungen mit englischen Bewerbungsbriefe und weiß auch nicht, wie die das machen. Ich hab gehört, englische Bewerbungen sollen anders sein als deutsche. Ich denke du weißt das schon und wenn nicht, dann erkundige dich in Internet nochmal (:
Viel Glück!
Letter of Motivation für ein 4-wöchiges Praktikum
Hey,
Ich weiss, das ist wahrscheinlich eine etwas anspruchsvollere Bitte, die Ich an euch habe aber ich würde mich trotzdem sehr darüber freuen, wenn mir hierbei jemand helfen könnte: Und zwar bewerbe ich mich für ein 4-wöchiges Praktikum bei einem Irischen Unternehmen. Da es sich um ein von der Schule organisiertes Programm handelt, kennen wir das Unternehmen nicht
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my interest in serving an internship in your company.
My name is Jan Müller and I am currently studying at the business related grammar school “Wirtschaftsgymnasium” in Berlin at (?) which I will do my “Abitur” (A levels) in summer 2013.
The possibility of making practical experiences in your company provoked my interest because it is a perfect way to improve my language-skills on the one hand and to get to know the Irish culture and tradition on the other.
As my CV indicates, I am very language-interested: Because of the origin of my parents, I am bilingual, which means that I have two native languages which are German and Polish. Additionally I possess very good English-skills in speech and writing and basic French-skills (Delf A2).
Furthermore, I am studying Spanish since 2010 and made my Latin proficiency certificate last year.
By absolving/serving an internship in your company I hope not only to improve my English-skills but also to get to know Ireland and it´s culture and traditions, as I already made very good experiences by taking part in a 4-week exchange program to Lima, Peru in 2009.
The second topic I am very interested in and which I hope to learn more about by serving an internship is business and economics. Since my early youth I am interested in this topic as/so (?) I made for example a 2-week internship at a local financial consultant in 2010. Additionally, I decided to intensify my economic- and business knowledge by visiting the “Wirtschaftsgymnasium” in Rheine, which concentrates on the topics business economics and English /which is very business economics-oriented (?)
I am very reliable, thorough and communicative. Furthermore I enjoy facing new challenges and getting to know new people, so I am very sure that I will be a huge benefit to your company.
I would be very grateful to be given the opportunity to be part of your company. I am looking forward to visit you soon in Cork.
//Thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your response.
Danke schonmal
Ich weiss, das ist wahrscheinlich eine etwas anspruchsvollere Bitte, die Ich an euch habe aber ich würde mich trotzdem sehr darüber freuen, wenn mir hierbei jemand helfen könnte: Und zwar bewerbe ich mich für ein 4-wöchiges Praktikum bei einem Irischen Unternehmen. Da es sich um ein von der Schule organisiertes Programm handelt, kennen wir das Unternehmen nicht
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my interest in serving an internship in your company.
My name is Jan Müller and I am currently studying at the business related grammar school “Wirtschaftsgymnasium” in Berlin at (?) which I will do my “Abitur” (A levels) in summer 2013.
The possibility of making practical experiences in your company provoked my interest because it is a perfect way to improve my language-skills on the one hand and to get to know the Irish culture and tradition on the other.
As my CV indicates, I am very language-interested: Because of the origin of my parents, I am bilingual, which means that I have two native languages which are German and Polish. Additionally I possess very good English-skills in speech and writing and basic French-skills (Delf A2).
Furthermore, I am studying Spanish since 2010 and made my Latin proficiency certificate last year.
By absolving/serving an internship in your company I hope not only to improve my English-skills but also to get to know Ireland and it´s culture and traditions, as I already made very good experiences by taking part in a 4-week exchange program to Lima, Peru in 2009.
The second topic I am very interested in and which I hope to learn more about by serving an internship is business and economics. Since my early youth I am interested in this topic as/so (?) I made for example a 2-week internship at a local financial consultant in 2010. Additionally, I decided to intensify my economic- and business knowledge by visiting the “Wirtschaftsgymnasium” in Rheine, which concentrates on the topics business economics and English /which is very business economics-oriented (?)
I am very reliable, thorough and communicative. Furthermore I enjoy facing new challenges and getting to know new people, so I am very sure that I will be a huge benefit to your company.
I would be very grateful to be given the opportunity to be part of your company. I am looking forward to visit you soon in Cork.
//Thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your response.
Danke schonmal
Well of course, Contotion,
da mir das Schreiben schwerer fällt, denn das Lesen, verzichte ich auf weitetres Englisch.
Ich finde, gerade für ein Praktikum liest sich das Schreiben sehr gut.
Rein vorsorglich würde ich dir aber raten, einmal zu googeln, welche Anforderungen in Irland bei Bewerbungen gelten.
Während etwa in Deutschland es noch gerne gesehen wird, wenn zu der Bewerbung auch noch ein Foto des Bewerbers gehört, ist das etwa in xden Niederlanden und den USA ein absolutes NoGo und führt umgehend zu einer Absage. Ich könnte mir vorstellen, dass es in Irland auch Eigenheiten gibt, die zu beachten sind.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg
da mir das Schreiben schwerer fällt, denn das Lesen, verzichte ich auf weitetres Englisch.
Ich finde, gerade für ein Praktikum liest sich das Schreiben sehr gut.
Rein vorsorglich würde ich dir aber raten, einmal zu googeln, welche Anforderungen in Irland bei Bewerbungen gelten.
Während etwa in Deutschland es noch gerne gesehen wird, wenn zu der Bewerbung auch noch ein Foto des Bewerbers gehört, ist das etwa in xden Niederlanden und den USA ein absolutes NoGo und führt umgehend zu einer Absage. Ich könnte mir vorstellen, dass es in Irland auch Eigenheiten gibt, die zu beachten sind.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg
ich würde originelle Wörter wie kudos, multifarious, enjoined und acquit nicht benutzen, die du vermutlich aus dem Wörterbuch hast. acquit hat meines Erachtens eine ganz andere bedeutung als du sie hier wohl beabsichtigst, auch LEO gibt mir da recht. schreib das in deinen eigenen worten, achte auf deinen satzbau, manche sätze klingen sehr wörtlich aus dem deutschen rübergeholt.
und: unbedingt über lebenslauf gepflogenheiten im britischen/amerikanischen Raum informieren.
Bis auf die Einleitung finde ich dein Schreiben aber inhaltlich gut.
und: unbedingt über lebenslauf gepflogenheiten im britischen/amerikanischen Raum informieren.
Bis auf die Einleitung finde ich dein Schreiben aber inhaltlich gut.
Hallo!
Das ist mein erstes Posting hier, und weil ich Italiener bin, entschuldige ich mich sofort für meine zahlreiche Fehlern.
Diese Diskussion interessiert mich sehr, weil ich gerade dabei bin, eine Bewerbung auf Deutsch zu schreiben. Ich bin ziemlich unsicher, das zu schaffen und auch mit meinen Sprachkenntnissen in Deutschland arbeiten zu können. Ich zitiere aber Werner, weil ich oft das gleiche Denken gehabt habe. Mein Zweifel ist nun: ist mehr sinnvoll eine perfekte Bewerbung schicken, die aber nicht unsere Sprachkenntnisse darstellt, oder vielleicht eine, die richtig- aber mit einem niedrigen Sprachniveau geschrieben ist?
Was meint ihr?
Danke!
Batto
Das ist mein erstes Posting hier, und weil ich Italiener bin, entschuldige ich mich sofort für meine zahlreiche Fehlern.
Diese Diskussion interessiert mich sehr, weil ich gerade dabei bin, eine Bewerbung auf Deutsch zu schreiben. Ich bin ziemlich unsicher, das zu schaffen und auch mit meinen Sprachkenntnissen in Deutschland arbeiten zu können. Ich zitiere aber Werner, weil ich oft das gleiche Denken gehabt habe. Mein Zweifel ist nun: ist mehr sinnvoll eine perfekte Bewerbung schicken, die aber nicht unsere Sprachkenntnisse darstellt, oder vielleicht eine, die richtig- aber mit einem niedrigen Sprachniveau geschrieben ist?
Was meint ihr?
Danke!
Batto
Oxford/Serial Comma?
Hallo Leute,
bin gerade am fertigstellen einer Bewerbung und mir ist aufgefallen, dass in engl. Resumes oft das sog. Oxford bzw. Serial Comma verwendet wird.
Ich bin mir im klaren, dass im angloam. Raum jeder diese Regelung kennt aber würdet ihr das setzen solcher Kommas empfehlen wenn man sich in Orten wie Dubai/Abu Dhabi/Qatar etc. bewirbt?
Oder sollte man auf Nummer sicher gehen und das weglassen, da es als Fehler interpretiert werden kann? (würde aber sehr viel übersichtlichtkeit einbüßen, da ich in manchen Aufzählungen sehr viele "and´s" drinnstehen habe)
bin gerade am fertigstellen einer Bewerbung und mir ist aufgefallen, dass in engl. Resumes oft das sog. Oxford bzw. Serial Comma verwendet wird.
Ich bin mir im klaren, dass im angloam. Raum jeder diese Regelung kennt aber würdet ihr das setzen solcher Kommas empfehlen wenn man sich in Orten wie Dubai/Abu Dhabi/Qatar etc. bewirbt?
Oder sollte man auf Nummer sicher gehen und das weglassen, da es als Fehler interpretiert werden kann? (würde aber sehr viel übersichtlichtkeit einbüßen, da ich in manchen Aufzählungen sehr viele "and´s" drinnstehen habe)
Hallo BuDo,
also wenn du dich in den Golfstaaten bewirbst solltest Du, je nach dem, um welche Position es geht, die entsprechenden sprachlichen Standards berücksichtigen. Denn das ist bereits die erste Messlatte, die bei der Auswahl darüber entscheidet, ob Du in die zweite Runde kommst oder quasi in der ersten Kurve rausgetragen wirst.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg
ps: wenn Du Deutsch als Muttersprache im Lebenslauf angibst, solltest du aber auch auf die sprachlichen Fertigkeiten achten. "bin gerade am fertigstellen einer Bewerbung" ist nicht unbedingt ein Beleg entsprechender sprachlicher Qualifikationen.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg
also wenn du dich in den Golfstaaten bewirbst solltest Du, je nach dem, um welche Position es geht, die entsprechenden sprachlichen Standards berücksichtigen. Denn das ist bereits die erste Messlatte, die bei der Auswahl darüber entscheidet, ob Du in die zweite Runde kommst oder quasi in der ersten Kurve rausgetragen wirst.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg
ps: wenn Du Deutsch als Muttersprache im Lebenslauf angibst, solltest du aber auch auf die sprachlichen Fertigkeiten achten. "bin gerade am fertigstellen einer Bewerbung" ist nicht unbedingt ein Beleg entsprechender sprachlicher Qualifikationen.
Viele Grüße aus Duisburg