Bewerbung für ein Praktikum in Australien - Curiculum Vitae

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AT1981
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Registriert: 12.03.2007, 13:48

Bewerbung für ein Praktikum in Australien - Curiculum Vitae

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Hallo,

hier sehr ihr mein Curiculum Vitae. Ich habe mich dabei an denen hier orientiert. Rechtschreibfehler sollten eigentlich nicht drin sein. Mein Satzbau und die dazugehörige Grammatik sind jedoch nicht perfekt.

Deshalb erbitte ich Tipps, was ich ändern kann/muss.

Danke im Voraus.


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Max M
Musterstr. 19a
55555 Musterstadt
Germany
maxi.muster@muster-anbieter.de
0049 123 45678910
Sunday 18th March 2007








Re: Industrial Training



Dear Sir or Madam,


I finished last month my study in “Engineering and Business Administration” with a diploma on the University for applied sciences in Gelsenkirchen, Germany. Actually I am searching for a new challenge. So I want to do 'work and travel’ in Australia and work in an interesting company.
When I arrive in Australia I will visit a language school for one month to improve my English on a higher level.
Please tell me if there are any possibilities to work for five or six month for your company in Australia (approximately 2007/May, June – 2007/September), or alternatively please give me a contact to someone who can help me.

Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely


Max Mustermann

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CAREER OBJECTIVE
To gain experiences in a company in another country where I get to know another work culture.


EDUCATION
2002 – Feb. 2007 Diploma in “Engineering and Business Administration”, University of Applied Sciences Gelsenkirchen (German: Diplom Wirtschaftsingenieur (FH))

Diploma Thesis: 1.3 (on a scale from 1 (best) to 6)
- Topic: Analysing work in a virtual team, improving und decentralisation of processes, optimization of the quality process for a sales information system at Siemens IT Solutions and Services

Grade point average: 2.35 (on a scale from 1 (best) to 6)

2002 Higher School Certificate, Mustergymnasium Musterstadt


INDUSTRIAL TRAINING
Oct. 2006 – Feb. 2007 Siemens IT Solutions and Services GmbH & Co. OHG, Munich, Diploma Thesis


Apr. 2006 – Sep. 2006 Siemens Business Services & Co OHG, Munich, Industrial Training

Key projects: Management support; Creating statistics; Development of subprojects

Achievements: Working in an international team and developing a sales information system.


Mar. 2003 – Feb. 2007 CEO of xxxx GmbH, Musterstadt

Achievements: Working along the complete value chain in a little IT-company.


Jul. 2002 – Aug. 2002 Steuerkanzlei xxxx, Musterstadt, Industrial Training

Achievements: Getting a insight into tax consultant office

Jul. 2003 – Aug. 2003 xxxx Consult, Musterstadt, Industrial Training

Achievements: Getting a insight into consultant office


May 2000 – Apr. 2002 Rewe xxxx, Musterstadt, temporary worker




SKILLS

Teamwork
I worked for over 9 month successfully in a team at Siemens AG. At xxxx GmbH I also worked in a team for over three years.


Analytical
In analyzing the quality process of a sales information system at Siemens IT Solutions and Services, I gathered a lot of knowledge in abstracting and picturing of processes.


Marketing
At Siemens AG I was a part of a marketing team.


Computing
Experienced in using Microsoft Office products (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Project), Windows (95, 98, Me, 2000, XP), Microsoft FrontPage and ARIS Easydesign.
Baddy
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Registriert: 03.09.2006, 05:33

Re: Bewerbung für ein Praktikum in Australien - Curiculum Vi

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AT1981 hat geschrieben:Hallo,

hier sehr ihr mein Curiculum Vitae (der wird anders geschrieben, ich hoffe, dass du das weißt... Curriculum Vitae!). Ich habe mich dabei an denen hier orientiert. Rechtschreibfehler sollten eigentlich nicht drin sein. Mein Satzbau und die dazugehörige Grammatik sind jedoch nicht perfekt.

Deshalb erbitte ich Tipps, was ich ändern kann/muss.

Danke im Voraus.


------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Max M
Musterstr. 19a
55555 Musterstadt
Germany
maxi.muster@muster-anbieter.de
0049 123 45678910
Sunday 18th March 2007








Re: Industrial Training



Dear Sir or Madam,


I finished last month my study in “Engineering and Business Administration” with a diploma ein Diplom ist in Australien nichts besonderes...das kann jeder machen, auch ohne den Year 12 Abschluss. on the University for applied sciences in Gelsenkirchen, Germany. Actually I am searching (looking?) for a new challenge. So (That is why ... aber auch das ist jetzt nicht suuupertoll) I want to do 'work and travel’ in Australia and work in an interesting nur in einer interessanten firma? na super... company.
When I arrive in Australia I will visit a language school for one month to improve my English on a higher level.
Please tell me if there are any possibilities to work for five or six month for your company in Australia (approximately 2007/May, June – 2007/September), or alternatively please give me a contact to someone who can help me.

Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely


Max Mustermann

ehrlichgesagt würde ich eine richtige bewerbung verfassen, so wie du sie auch auf deutsch verfassen würdest...natürlich auf englisch...das ist irgendwie nicht wirklich was, finde ich.

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CAREER OBJECTIVE
To gain experiences in a company in another country where I get to know another work culture.


EDUCATION
2002 – Feb. 2007 Diploma in “Engineering and Business Administration”, University of Applied Sciences Gelsenkirchen (German: Diplom Wirtschaftsingenieur (FH))

Diploma Thesis: 1.3 (on a scale from 1 (best) to 6)
- Topic: Analysing work in a virtual team, improving und decentralisation of processes, optimization of the quality process for a sales information system at Siemens IT Solutions and Services

Grade point average: 2.35 (on a scale from 1 (best) to 6)

2002 Higher School Certificate, Mustergymnasium Musterstadt


INDUSTRIAL TRAINING
Oct. 2006 – Feb. 2007 Siemens IT Solutions and Services GmbH & Co. OHG, Munich, Diploma Thesis


Apr. 2006 – Sep. 2006 Siemens Business Services & Co OHG, Munich, Industrial Training

Key projects: Management support; Creating statistics; Development of subprojects

Achievements: Working in an international team and developing a sales information system.


Mar. 2003 – Feb. 2007 CEO of xxxx GmbH, Musterstadt

Achievements: Working along the complete value chain in a little IT-company.


Jul. 2002 – Aug. 2002 Steuerkanzlei xxxx, Musterstadt, Industrial Training

Achievements: Getting a insight into tax consultant office

Jul. 2003 – Aug. 2003 xxxx Consult, Musterstadt, Industrial Training

Achievements: Getting a insight into consultant office


May 2000 – Apr. 2002 Rewe xxxx, Musterstadt, temporary worker




SKILLS

Teamwork
I worked for over 9 month successfully in a team at Siemens AG. At xxxx GmbH I also worked in a team for over three years.


Analytical
In analyzing the quality process of a sales information system at Siemens IT Solutions and Services, I gathered a lot of knowledge in abstracting and picturing of processes.


Marketing
At Siemens AG I was a part of a marketing team.


Computing
Experienced in using Microsoft Office products (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Project), Windows (95, 98, Me, 2000, XP), Microsoft FrontPage and ARIS Easydesign.
du hüpfst auchn bissl von den zeiten...das neuste kommt immer nach oben, das älteste nach unten.
AT1981
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Registriert: 12.03.2007, 13:48

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Ah, stimmt. Danke.
Baddy
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Registriert: 03.09.2006, 05:33

Beitrag von Baddy »

ich hab auch noch anmerkungen im text gemacht
AT1981
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Registriert: 12.03.2007, 13:48

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Spitze!
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